Fic: The Weight of Water (Dean/OFC, Sam)

[twasadark]

I WROTE HET!!!! Does anyone even READ het in this fandom? Or any fandom? Anyhow, here it is ...

Title: The Weight of Water
Author: twasadark 
Pairing: Dean/OFC, Sam
Rating: Adult
Words: 5300
Prompt: This is my attempt to incorporate angst and romantic gestures in a fic. Which sorta came out as schmoop and h/c. Written for violettestars in the spn_summerlove challenge.
Summary: Dean and Sam are hunting a phantom mustang herd on the property of spitfire ranch owner Mandy O’Malley. She can’t stand Dean. He finds her irritating and oversensitive. So of course they must have sex.
Note: Fic named after the song whose melody I can’t get out of my head. It quite possibly has nothing whatsoever else to do with the story. Does that matter? Thanks to mizbhaven13 for the lightning fast beta.

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Comments

[leandralocke.livejournal.com]

Okay, as I promised I'm reading on. Took me a little longer than I wanted...

I still like your over-all writing style a lot. It's easy to read, witty but also not too simple, just has the right amount of everything, if that makes sense ;)

Oh, God. “Dean, you were practically delirious. You probably hallucinated all kinds of things."

Dean's mouth twisted wryly. “I didn't hallucinate the fact that you kissed me.”

Haha, yeah, Dean can tell the difference between a real kiss and a hallucination ;) Nice one.

Oh Jesus, Mandy! What are you doing, girl? *headdesk*
Haha @ Dean's reply though "I liked it" *g*

...with your swaggering and smirking and talking to my chest instead of my face,...

*gives Mandy a t-shirt saying "I have eyes you asshole!" :D

His eyes flickered from her chest to her face. “I talk to your, uh …”

“My boobs?” She asked, trying not to sound sarcastic. “Yeah. You’re pretty obvious about it.”

LMAO that's so typical Dean haha. Great.

And awwww, so cute. It's absolutely adorable how Dean can be such a macho jerk and such a gentleman at the same time.... eerrr yeah I know it sounds stupid but it's true *g*

God, she looked like she had been thoroughly fucked. Which, okay, she had been
God, I so want to be her! LOL

*fans herself* Oh God.... now it's getting hot in here. And mind, I was freezing my butt off earlier because it got darn cold.
I like your extra portion of realism here, because we all know not every woman comes every time; in fact many have problems with that.
I somehow think it'll work this time...

Yep, I was right. And ooooh God. Oh my fudging God! LOL. Woah, that was really, really hot. It was oth naughty and sweat, very sensual, very atmospheric. Really good sex scene, and believe me, I've read countless bad ones ;)
Good job!

And did I mention that I WANNA BE HER?

He kissed her, long and lazy and sweet. And the hay and stables? Well, they were just going to have to wait.

OR he could teach her a fourth thing in the hay :D

Hey, this was really good. Really enjoyed this fic. I think you got Dean very well, and I also liked Mandy. I could identify with her a little (Okay, I secretly imagined her to be me *coughs*), and she was an interesting character that seemed less one-dimensional than Cassie, although they seem to be of a similar type (the bitchy attitude and the arguing e.g.).

Really nice fic. Enjoyed it a lot :)

I think I need a cold shower now, though.

[twasadark.livejournal.com]

Wow!!! Thanks so much for your detailed comments! I'm really glad you liked the fic and that it made you take a cold shower, haha! I always kinda figured that Dean would get a woman who would challenge the hell out of him. Carmen was so .... bland.